Comments for PhilWP's Summer Writing Camp http://writephilly.wordpress.com Work From the Philadelphia Writing Project's Summer Writing Camp Thu, 31 Jul 2008 22:24:14 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on “What’s A Cheesesteak?” by eryoung81 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/30/whats-a-cheesesteak/#comment-59 eryoung81 Thu, 31 Jul 2008 22:24:14 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=71#comment-59 Rumman, your descriptions and dialogs really stand out to me in this piece. Both of your personalities really come through. I'd like to hear more about the adventures of Zainab and Rumman! Rumman, your descriptions and dialogs really stand out to me in this piece. Both of your personalities really come through. I’d like to hear more about the adventures of Zainab and Rumman!

]]> Comment on Untitled. by eryoung81 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/29/untitled/#comment-58 eryoung81 Thu, 31 Jul 2008 22:22:37 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=67#comment-58 Alex, this is a neat example of a narrative poem! I love your use of onomatopoeia, clomp, clomp, and the metaphors. Thanks for sharing your writing! Alex, this is a neat example of a narrative poem! I love your use of onomatopoeia, clomp, clomp, and the metaphors. Thanks for sharing your writing!

]]> Comment on Character Sketch About Brittany H. by eryoung81 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/30/character-sketch-about-brittany-h/#comment-57 eryoung81 Thu, 31 Jul 2008 22:19:39 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=74#comment-57 Ashley, even though you say you don't know a lot about Brittany, you really do! I love your description of how you see her life view from her poem and your thoughts on her future. Ashley, even though you say you don’t know a lot about Brittany, you really do! I love your description of how you see her life view from her poem and your thoughts on her future.

]]> Comment on 5 Senses- Alex’s Shoes by fbh3693 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/23/5-senses-alex%e2%80%99s-shoes/#comment-55 fbh3693 Wed, 30 Jul 2008 15:29:29 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=38#comment-55 nice, a powerful beginning. nice, a powerful beginning.

]]> Comment on My school by fbh3693 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/23/my-school/#comment-52 fbh3693 Wed, 30 Jul 2008 15:18:14 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=18#comment-52 Hey, thanks for replying all. My school isn't really crazy like I described, I just exaggerated :) Hey, thanks for replying all. My school isn’t really crazy like I described, I just exaggerated :)

]]> Comment on 5 Senses- Alex’s Shoes by nickt47 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/23/5-senses-alex%e2%80%99s-shoes/#comment-49 nickt47 Tue, 29 Jul 2008 15:55:17 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=38#comment-49 yo, lee haha. ok i like this. in the beginning it has a lot of energy, and then you get descriptive. is good yo, lee

haha. ok

i like this. in the beginning it has a lot of energy, and then you get descriptive.

is good

]]> Comment on The Fight by ballerina4ever http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/23/the-fight/#comment-48 ballerina4ever Tue, 29 Jul 2008 15:49:24 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=15#comment-48 brittany h your poems are great and really inspires people bec ause i know your work inspires me. hugs and kisses xoxo aSHLEY brittany h your poems are great and really inspires people bec ause i know your work inspires me.

hugs and kisses xoxo

aSHLEY

]]> Comment on Rumman by Nick T. by aphilly124 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/23/nick-tannen/#comment-47 aphilly124 Tue, 29 Jul 2008 02:49:15 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=31#comment-47 i like this description. its really funny. i like this description. its really funny.

]]> Comment on My school by aphilly124 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/23/my-school/#comment-46 aphilly124 Tue, 29 Jul 2008 02:45:40 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=18#comment-46 haha wow. nice chang =] haha wow. nice chang =]

]]> Comment on The Fight by aphilly124 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/2008/07/23/the-fight/#comment-45 aphilly124 Tue, 29 Jul 2008 02:44:14 +0000 http://writephilly.wordpress.com/?p=15#comment-45 I agree with erica. it's really intense. it makes me really sad. I agree with erica. it’s really intense. it makes me really sad.

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